Heir To The Throne

30 Apr

Written for: Friday Fictioneers

2 May 2014

Copyright - Renee Heath

PHOTO PROMPT – Copyright – Renee Heath

The Queen’s labor had gone on all evening and into the wee hours of the morning. Her attendants lost count of how many candles had been lit but streams of cooled wax attested to the long night. Finally the child arrived. The doctor rushed out to seek the King..

Sire, you must go to your Queen immediately. The birth was long and difficult. She has lost a lot of blood and we are not sure we can save her.

What of my newborn son? My heir to the throne?

Sire, the child is a girl

Then they both shall die



25 Responses to “Heir To The Throne”

  1. Brenda April 30, 2014 at 7:45 am #


  2. David Stewart April 30, 2014 at 7:49 am #

    That last line was like a gut-punch. He’s not the sort of man who deserves a wife or child at all, in my opinion.

  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) April 30, 2014 at 8:00 am #

    This shows so much coldheartedness that I have to pinch myself to remember that this can be quite true.

  4. siobhanmcnamara April 30, 2014 at 8:04 am #

    Shocking in its truth. Great build-up to that strong last line

  5. Dee April 30, 2014 at 8:30 am #

    Well written,the sad part is that it can be true. I liked …streams of cooled wax attested to the long night… great line.

  6. FabricatingFiction April 30, 2014 at 8:44 am #


  7. wmqcolby April 30, 2014 at 8:50 am #

    Ouch! A great build-up (no pun intended!) and punch. Henry the VIII probably would have done the same. Marvelous!

  8. patriciaruthsusan April 30, 2014 at 9:20 am #

    HF, This is one cruel king. I would hope all his children were girls, but that would mean their deaths along with there mothers I guess. This guy is worse than King Henry VIII. 😦 He doesn’t deserve any children, even boys. Well written and interesting story. 🙂


  9. Sandra April 30, 2014 at 11:18 am #

    Good grief! I hope he never has a son … you wouldn’t want a line like that continuing forward.

  10. paulmclem April 30, 2014 at 12:28 pm #

    I laughed. Is/Was that wrong 🙂

  11. sustainabilitea April 30, 2014 at 1:46 pm #

    So much for a fairy tale ending…although many fairy tales can be somewhat (dare I say/spell) Grimm. Good use of the candle.


  12. misskzebra April 30, 2014 at 5:57 pm #

    Oh dear, reminds me of Game of Thrones. This could be a more compassionate Joffrey.

  13. aliciajamtaas April 30, 2014 at 7:21 pm #

    I’m not at all surprised by this ending. This probably happened more often than we know in “the dark ages” and probably still happens in many countries. Good take on the prompt.

  14. Jan Brown May 1, 2014 at 1:59 am #

    Strong ending. Damn men!

  15. rochellewisoff May 1, 2014 at 6:03 am #

    Dear Patricia,

    Stellar use of the prompt. Love the story, hate the king. Bravo!



  16. Lucy May 1, 2014 at 1:08 pm #

    The insufferable twit. Hope he falls off his high horse. Good job. Lucy

  17. Judah First May 1, 2014 at 2:19 pm #

    Excellent job! Bad king, great tale! 🙂

  18. elappleby May 1, 2014 at 4:37 pm #

    May he be blessed with all girl children (except that probably wouldn’t be very nice for the girls!)

  19. Lisa Yow-Williams May 1, 2014 at 5:50 pm #

    Brutal, to say the least! You’ve written an epic tale. Now, off with the kings head!

  20. Horus May 1, 2014 at 11:36 pm #

    Things you must do to keep the throne safe ! 🙂

  21. patrickprinsloo May 2, 2014 at 11:26 am #

    So no fiction this week? A good reminder.

  22. jenniesisler May 2, 2014 at 11:52 am #

    So I want to see the follow up where the king find out he’s fathered an ilegitimate daughter who threatens to kill him and take the throne. Excellent story that needed few words to convey tension and anguish.

  23. francischristianlubag May 5, 2014 at 10:15 am #

    Oh boy. This isn’t gonna go well. Anyway, I felt the impending chills of the coldheartedness and what’s gonna happen next. Kudos.

  24. lingeringvisions by Dawn May 6, 2014 at 11:35 am #

    I could almost hear shouts of “off with her head!”

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