The first time…

14 Jan
Trifextra: Week 100
This weeks challenge:
We are asking for a 33-word response to the following snippet:

The first time I saw. . .

Here’s the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each.  We’re going low-brow on your this week.  Or not.  Can you class it up under these restrictions?

The first time I saw
a corpse
it was on the edge of our lawn
shocked at how stiff it was
I picked it up
and brought it in the house
to show Mom
She was not pleased
Trifextra: Week 100

10 Responses to “The first time…”

  1. Grace Black January 14, 2014 at 1:25 pm #

    Haha! Awesome.

  2. Kathy Combs January 14, 2014 at 2:47 pm #

    Oh that is a little freaky, but awesome imaginative take!!

  3. jannatwrites January 15, 2014 at 1:00 am #

    And my mother-in-law got upset when her cat brought a dead mouse inside… 🙂

  4. catherinebwrites January 15, 2014 at 8:04 am #

    What an adventurous child!

  5. Cobbie's World January 16, 2014 at 6:05 pm #

    This is an awesome post! Love the word “corpse” with the prompt; it was a real attention-getter. Loved the ending, too. Great job providing us with a good laugh with your excellent post!

  6. Rexie January 16, 2014 at 11:39 pm #

    This is so funny and not at all like the ones i read till now. hahaha! Good one.

  7. ktwriter7 January 16, 2014 at 11:44 pm #

    Love this! Such a creative use of the prompt!

  8. Wisper January 17, 2014 at 9:03 pm #

    I can certainly imagine Mom was not pleased. That ending is the perfect touch to the rather dark, ominous start. Great job!

  9. Draug419 January 19, 2014 at 9:31 am #

    Awesome work.

  10. trifectawriting January 19, 2014 at 11:32 pm #

    Jeez, pleased would be the farthest from what I’d be feeling too.

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