Friday Fictioneers

2 Jan

3 January 2014

Tree Climbing Poppy

Can you see them ?

Mommy says they are coming today.

I can’t wait to see Nana and Grampie, they have been gone since forever

Nana makes the bestest cookies in the whole wide world

Sparky woofs in agreement

and Grampie takes us to the park and plays ball and pushes the swing and lifts me high into the clouds and buys me icecream

Sparky drools just thinking of french vanilla

A red car turns the corner and slowly drives past. It’s not them.

sparky shakes his head no

Amanda sighs and kicks at the dirt

it’s taking too long ..

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9 Responses to “Friday Fictioneers”

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) January 2, 2014 at 3:56 pm #

    Such a real voice here.. this is how it should say.. waiting took for ever when you where a kid… and probably the same for dogs.

  2. Jan Brown January 2, 2014 at 5:37 pm #

    I like the voice of the child here…very effective. Also enjoyed the concept of the dog as a lookout 🙂

  3. plaridel January 2, 2014 at 7:48 pm #

    i’d been there and done that. i can relate.

  4. silentlyheardonce January 2, 2014 at 8:39 pm #

    Nice dialogue. My character is named Sparky yous is the third. Great minds and all. 🙂

  5. Sandra January 3, 2014 at 2:53 am #

    That’s such an apt take on the prompt, captures it beautifully.

  6. sustainabilitea January 3, 2014 at 9:35 am #

    I really like the “realness” of this. Time to children is often so different than to us. I used to make paper chains with one link for each day until vacation so that the girls could cut off one link each day and have some idea how long it would be. Wonderful little vignette here.

    janet

  7. talesfromthemotherland January 3, 2014 at 7:20 pm #

    You’ve done a wonderful job of capturing a child’s voice. This feels so authentic and real… if dogs spoke. 😉 Nice job!

  8. Lyn January 3, 2014 at 8:47 pm #

    Nicely done Miss Raspberry! Definitely agree with what the others said: You’ve done a wonderful job of capturing a child’s voice 😀

  9. lingeringvisions by Dawn January 5, 2014 at 8:41 am #

    Very cute.

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