Ligo Haibun Challenge – 01/11-07/11

3 Nov

Ligo Haibun Challenge – 01/11-07/11

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I open the window of my fourth floor walk – up and let the sounds and the aromas of the street below enter my appartement. It is late in the season and the air is beginning to have a freshness about it, a nudging toward autumn.

I move my chair closer to the sill and listen carefully to the voices beneath, office workers on their way to busy days, the newspaper vendor rolling open his kiosk, and the bicycle bell of the man who delivers fresh produce door to door. These are my companions – I who live alone in a tiny studio with nothing and no one to call my own.

on autumn breezes

finding companionship

in distant voices

It was not always so, but age and mobility problems have kept me tethered to this wretched place. The name of the city is of no importance, loneliness and poverty stretch from continent to continent. We, the elderly, have been forgotten. Past the age of being useful to society we are now a nuance, a burden until carried to the grave.

alone and forgotten

a withered man

waits for God

_____________________________

although I realize that it is preferable that a haibun be written in the first-person, sometimes there are things that need to be said ..pmc

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9 Responses to “Ligo Haibun Challenge – 01/11-07/11”

  1. Ye Pirate November 3, 2013 at 9:42 am #

    Patricia – it is beautiful and heartfelt,and was in 1st person – even if the voice was temporary. Please feel free to express your haibun the way you feel best. I would hate to think I was blocking in any form. This was an absolutely beautiful – and timeless – piece. The rhythm was natural, fitting, the haiku really fit nicely, and were he essence of the prose. Well done!

  2. Anja November 3, 2013 at 9:47 am #

    Heartbreaking but true…..and we will all be facing those same issues. Really enjoyed this haibun.

  3. atrm61 November 5, 2013 at 3:47 pm #

    Oh,this is so poignant!And so true!Loved the voice in here Patricia-amazingly sensitive:-)

  4. Brenda November 5, 2013 at 8:44 pm #

    Very moving. I wish our culture did not push so much alone-ness sometimes. We all need each other. Wonderful writing!

  5. freyathewriter November 6, 2013 at 11:08 am #

    There is so much emphasis of being in a couple, having children, being part of something. We don’t always feel like this is what we want and need in our life. But all of this emphasis then serves to make those who are alone out of choice, feel lonely, out of step and outcasts from society, as if they are lacking somehow. Interesting and thoughtfully written.

  6. paulscribbles November 7, 2013 at 10:19 am #

    It’s an honest sentiment and one that most definitely applies more in the west. Knowing this photo is Katmandu makes me wonder if that would apply there or in any such city. An intriguing piece of writing.

  7. Sun November 7, 2013 at 9:48 pm #

    thank you for this stark reality on aging – the season of life most of us must go through, unfortunately. if only the fountain of youth exists.

  8. Suzanne November 8, 2013 at 12:11 am #

    What a sad reality you depict here.

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