Union Station

28 Aug

Friday Fictioneers

30 August 2013

Copyright - Dawn M. Miller

Copyright – Dawn M. Miller

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“Stay together children, we don’t want to lose anyone”

There was no danger of that happening, the six small children hang on to one another as tightly as possible.

It has been a difficult journey. Seated in the first wagon behind the locomotive for the entire trip, they now reek of smoke, their little faces stained with soot.

The woman expertly steers them through the crowded lobby and into the street.

Martha watches from behind her jewelery counter as they pass through. She has seen them many times in the thirty years she has worked here.

The six orphans and their escort who suffocated to death in car number one, February 1943.

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20 Responses to “Union Station”

  1. Sandra August 28, 2013 at 7:06 am #

    Now that was a stunner of an ending, I thought you were telling a completely different tale here. Well done!

  2. Ye Pirate August 28, 2013 at 7:52 am #

    What an ending…sudden sadness…very clever piece indeed..

  3. Joe Owens August 28, 2013 at 9:11 am #

    I was about to have an issue with seeing the children many times over thirty years until i read the ending. Just like me to jump ahead. It was a fine story.

  4. Helena Hann-Basquiat August 28, 2013 at 9:55 am #

    Oooh… I love a good ghost story, darling. Well done!

  5. Lindaura Glamoura August 28, 2013 at 1:48 pm #

    Oh fantastic! I oohed with delight at the end of your tale. Very movingly and richly rendered.

  6. kz August 28, 2013 at 2:59 pm #

    shocking ending. well done! 🙂

  7. lingeringvisions by Dawn August 28, 2013 at 5:15 pm #

    Cool!

  8. claudia August 28, 2013 at 5:28 pm #

    Wow, super! It took me just a second to get the surprise ending.

  9. Shainbird August 28, 2013 at 6:10 pm #

    Fantastic tale!

  10. Perry Block (@PerryBlock) August 28, 2013 at 11:47 pm #

    Surprisingly spooky! Nice job.

  11. jwdwrites August 29, 2013 at 5:45 am #

    Nicely worked story. It felt very plausible and had me wondering if it was true. 🙂

  12. freyathewriter August 29, 2013 at 11:32 am #

    Oh, I wasn’t expecting that ending! Excellent twist at the end!

  13. Carrie August 29, 2013 at 12:34 pm #

    spooky twist!

  14. JackieP August 29, 2013 at 1:19 pm #

    Now that was an ending no one expected! Well done!

  15. DCTdesigns August 29, 2013 at 4:09 pm #

    brilliant twist at the end. Loved it!

  16. Linda Vernon August 30, 2013 at 3:42 pm #

    Oh I like the way you dropped that bit of info at the very end. A shocker! 😀

  17. Jan Brown August 30, 2013 at 4:44 pm #

    You really caught me by surprise. Good job!

  18. dmmacilroy August 31, 2013 at 2:45 am #

    Place your hand between my shoulders. There, can you feel it? The chills still running up and down my spine? They fuel my smile and bid me tell you, good job. Delightfully good job.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  19. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 31, 2013 at 3:08 am #

    I got goosebumps from that end…

  20. JKBradley August 31, 2013 at 10:52 am #

    What a way to die, and then having to remain and repeat the trip.

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