Friday Fictioneers – “The Gift”

1 May

kent-bonham                                      Copyright -Kent Bonham

He knew that she loved this old building as much as he did. It had been a coup de foudre on that day twenty-five years ago when they had first gazed upon it. They had taken dozens of photos at the time, even boldly sneaking into the lobby just to check it out. They were newlyweds back then and a stay in this grand hotel was out of the question.

Whenever  they were in San Antonio they would head straight to the riverwalk to admire it’s ornate balconies and colorful mosaics. This trip will be different..


this is my maiden voyage with Friday Fictioneers please feel free to comment


20 Responses to “Friday Fictioneers – “The Gift””

  1. Shreyank May 2, 2013 at 12:16 am #

    much remains unanswered ? welcome to FF 🙂

    • high five and raspberries May 2, 2013 at 6:00 am #

      I had not noticed the requirement for “an end”..I will try to behave myself next time. Thank-you for stopping by.

      • Shreyank May 2, 2013 at 6:21 am #

        no hard and fast rules.. its all up to you 🙂 some of the fictioneer’s continue there stories for 2 or 3 prompts ! Alastair and Jules have an entire series running 🙂

  2. Sandra May 2, 2013 at 2:29 am #

    Hopefully this time they can afford it, and it will have lost none of its magic. Nicely done and welcome to FF.

  3. Steve B May 2, 2013 at 4:59 am #

    Nice nostalgic feel. Leaves you wondering why this time will be different? What has changed? Don’t know if that qualifies as an end, or a “to be continued.”

  4. sustainabilitea May 2, 2013 at 7:03 am #

    Welcome to the mad group of Fictioneers. Sounds to me as though they’re going to be able to stay in the hotel of their dreams this time or is something more sinister going on? As for endings, they’re optional. 🙂 It’s fine to leave our imaginations working overtime.


  5. carolynpageabc May 2, 2013 at 9:30 am #

    I can identify with so much of this… A lovely walk down life’s paths…
    From one who is quickly being seduced by FF to another possible seduce e…
    Welcome.. 🙂

  6. Parul May 2, 2013 at 11:12 am #

    Not sure how this time is different. So many possibilities come to mind, sad and sadder.
    Good work, welcome to the hood 🙂

  7. paulmclem May 2, 2013 at 12:29 pm #

    Welcome to FF. Solid start there. Looking forward to some killer endings in weeks to come. Can’t beat a twist!

  8. Christopher Schuck May 3, 2013 at 12:24 am #

    Fun read. You made your character’s easy to relate to, so I want to know more about them. Welcome to FF! (I’m two stories in, but love it)

  9. lingeringvisions May 3, 2013 at 2:34 am #

    Welcome to the club! Nice story. I think all of us “regular folks” can relate to what it would mean to stay in a place like that.

  10. troy P. May 3, 2013 at 8:22 am #

    A touching read with a question mark at the end – nicely done, and welcome aboard =)

  11. David Stewart May 3, 2013 at 9:19 am #

    Welcome to the group. That’s a great piece. I’ve done that before with beautiful hotels. So, in the last line, do they finally have enough to stay there this time?

  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) May 3, 2013 at 3:35 pm #

    Welcome fellow poet… I think it’s great to leave a lot for the reader to fill in.. It’s a habit with FF… but a good one. I was hooked in October.

  13. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields May 4, 2013 at 9:41 am #

    Dear Patricia,
    Welcome to our diverse community of writers. Nice entrance. Your ending leaves us with a question but it’s still a viable ending. As PT Barnum said, “Always leave them wanting more.” I look forward to reading more from you.

  14. Mystikel May 4, 2013 at 4:55 pm #

    Very nice and welcome to FF. Where you stay really can make a vacation a different experience, same vacation place but a different world altogether sometimes.

  15. patrickprinsloo May 5, 2013 at 9:56 am #

    What a difference 25 years make. And great that they are still together. At least I assume they are. Maybe he is by himself. Oh dear!

  16. Brian Benoit May 5, 2013 at 3:49 pm #

    Welcome to the Fictioneers! I’m a fan of your first story, and thus a fan of yours already. I want to know what happens next and what will make this trip different…intriguing!

  17. rgayer55 May 6, 2013 at 9:03 am #

    the last line creates opportunity for a variety of twists and turns and leaves plenty to the imagination. Welcome to Fictioneers. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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