Onitsura’s Valley Stream

17 Mar

Image

Once whispering stream

screaming out obscenities

after spring downpour

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With fish net in hand

I poise above valley stream

smelt for my supper

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15 Responses to “Onitsura’s Valley Stream”

  1. hardworkinjudy March 17, 2013 at 7:10 pm #

    Your haiku made me think of how the streams should scream obscenities at the foul things people dump there. Some people have so little concern about nature and its beauty.

  2. kz March 17, 2013 at 9:10 pm #

    wow powerful haiku… the image of the stream screaming out obscenities. well-penned

  3. jrbsays March 17, 2013 at 10:02 pm #

    “Flooding hell” perhaps 🙂

  4. Green Speck March 18, 2013 at 2:58 am #

    Stream screaming obscenities … now that made me think 😀

  5. rheumatologe March 18, 2013 at 7:58 am #

    Poor fish, I don’t wish you good luck. But the haiku are good!

  6. Chevrefeuille March 18, 2013 at 8:09 am #

    I can almost hear the stream.

  7. Magical Mystical Teacher March 18, 2013 at 8:44 am #

    I sort of think maybe the dwellers by the swollen stream are the ones screaming out obscenities!

    Singing Stone

  8. Joanne Moceri-Taveira March 18, 2013 at 10:53 am #

    I love when the spring melt and rains swell local streams and rivers….the rushing waters give me a rush…

  9. JazzBumpa March 18, 2013 at 11:03 am #

    valley stream
    so fast flowing in April
    bone dry in August

    Cheers!
    JzB

  10. WabiSabi March 18, 2013 at 12:08 pm #

    Yes that rushing spring does roar after a storm! Nicely done!

    23:6

  11. Adriana Dascalu March 18, 2013 at 12:44 pm #

    unique take in the first one!

  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) March 18, 2013 at 2:09 pm #

    A stream screaming obsenities is a wonderful metafor. As snow melts they tend to be full of rage. Very nice

  13. Panchali March 18, 2013 at 3:32 pm #

    Lyrical and passionate pieces…:)

  14. yepiratehere March 18, 2013 at 4:07 pm #

    Strong, that screaming stream…!

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